想幫你改 不過我想早點睡 先約略看一下
: Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen (不要演講)
: I am pleased to be here. Thank you for giving me this interview opportunity.
: My name is Michael Tsai. I entered National Cheng Kung University in 2009 and
: graduated in 2013 with a Bachelor of Systems and Naval Mechatronic
(X) 應該是想表達以學士身分 但寫這樣像利用一位學士
: Engineering degree.
: I am a person who is passionate about learning and good at supporting others.
( D E L E T E ) (改成：擅長與人相處或共事)
: For instance,I received the scholarship of Rachi company to teach mathematics
: in the KuangHua girl’s seniorhigh school.(這句我沒參透...接收獎學金去教學?)
: I have about 1 year of experience in the led testing company. I was
^(working for LED..../ exp in ~testing.)
: responsible for daily machine correlationand assisted staff to deal with
(似乎未完?) ^ (others/co-workers)
: unusual situations. My work experience has prepared me to work with all
^(e.g.) (句意、文法錯誤)
: types of people. I am interested in electrical machine, so I apply for the
(怪 種類是指? ) (不要只講興趣 要講能力夠不夠勝任)
: instrument and electrical equipment maintain engineer in the Solid-State
(maintenance) (X)
(我不知正確名稱 可以看公司徵才頁英文版)
: Polyester Division. I plan to learn programmable logic controller to help
(我覺得面試自己才正要學 意思等同"我就是不會")
: my work. My passion enables me to work hard and learn faster in any
: circumstances. If given the opportunity to join the company, I will be a
(主詞是I喔) (換公司名稱)
: great asset to the company as I make the best use of my skills and continue
(?)
: to improve.
: Thank you for your listening.
以上只是初步看一下，你先試著改看看
如果面試只是要看你英文口說流不流暢 那其實也不用太拘泥
增加長度可以加點日常興趣 說你喜歡運動之類的 或參加過社團
這都可能提升主管對你的認識 判斷你適不適合公司的工作性質