[請益] 目前寫作狀況請益

作者: joy159357 (RTing)   2016-02-29 15:48:10
本身是國立大學研究生,由於想申請國外的學校需要托福79分
沒有考過任何英檢 大學是用修全英語課方式過畢業門檻
托福狀況是自修練習
目前狀況閱讀在時間內答題正確7成 聽力大約是8成以上
這部分到這裡應該是個坎要上去可能要累積很多東西
現在比較大的問題是說跟寫的部分 要是連基本分都拿不到聽跟讀是救不回來的
所以目前這是目前練習寫作第一次的狀況 非常之難看
希望板友可以評一下這樣大概有多少分 哪裡需要改進
接下來一天都會各練習兩篇 想做一下衝刺
至於說的部分大概跟這狀況差不多
已下就是小弟的破文章.......題目是托福OG的
首先是整合
In the lecture, the man casts doubt on the information presented in the
passage.
First of all, the reading passage mentions that making a team for individual
project is a perfect decision, Therefore, the project will be worked
efficiently and creatively than be worked alone.
But, the lecturer points out that the project may not move quickly. Because
of it take too much of time to reach consensus. And the truly creative and
viable proposal may be rejected by the unsuitable team leader or someone in
charge.
Second, the reading passage assert that the consequence of a decision no
matter it succeed or fail would not be counted on only one person but the
whole team. However, the lecturer argues that this role has a big problem.
If there is a free-rider, he can take advantage of the group success without
paying. And as above said, an inappropriate leader make the team work in the
wrong way, and it blame on everyone.
Finally, the reading passage claims that assembling people in a team is good
to the individual's feeling by having honor from other teammates.
Nevertheless, the lecturer thinks differently. The free-rider will break the
passion of those who work hard and make the contribution. And the bad leading
and rejection will also kill the great mate's soul.
然後是獨立
From my point of view, I will strongly agree that always telling the truth is
the most important consideration in any relationship. While telling a lie
sounds a comfortable way in some situations, in fact, telling the truth will
bring more benefits to you.
There are three advantages of telling the truth that why I agree with.
First of all, the trust is the all means of a relationship. If you are not
trust worthy, how can I get along with you? Once you lied and I found it, we
would lose the trust between us. Next time you tell me something, and I need
to consider about the truth. Our relationship will be in the struggle.
On the other hand, telling the truth is pretty good for your feeling. You don
’t need to always worry about people will expose your lie or you lie would
be found. You will feeling comfortable with others. So I believe that always
telling the truth is healthy to your heart and your relationship.
Last but not least, telling the truth can test your relationship. To be
realistic, telling the truth is going to test that is he or she trust-worthy?
And can he or she accept the real, the whole you? Truth have its weight in
everyone’s heart. So if you can bear each other’s truth, your relationship
would be unshakable.
For the above reasons, I support that always telling the truth definitely is
more beneficial.
感謝各位版友
作者: lworld (相敬如冰)   2016-02-29 16:25:00
這樣的正確率,你總分應該已經過90了吧
作者: aronpan2 (萱萱的諺諺)   2016-02-29 18:50:00
同1大這樣應該破90啦
作者: joy159357 (RTing)   2016-02-29 19:27:00
uh..我還在擔心用字過淺跟內容不足的部分...
作者: lworld (相敬如冰)   2016-02-29 20:09:00
我記得補習老師有說英文作文不要一直用You 那是中文習慣

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