[創作] I want to be your knight Klaudia PTT批踢踢實業坊

[創作] I want to be your knight

作者: Klaudia (天佑台灣) 2013-07-14 14:17:41

I want to be your Knight,
and always guard you whenever day and night.
You are always right,
just like the sun and moon bring us in the light.
You are so shining and elegant that I can not move my sight.
And I wish you always sleep tight.

作者: Klaudia (天佑台灣) 2013-07-14 14:18:00

用了好多次Always,不知道該怎麼辦?

作者: korn31910 (ç¾…æ‹”) 2013-07-14 17:33:00

或可用同義字或去掉非必要的always

作者: spacedunce5 (è®€ä¸å®Œçš„æ›¸) 2013-07-15 15:37:00

always 的重複有獨特的韻味，倒是韻腳可以更多元

作者: Klaudia (天佑台灣) 2013-07-15 20:26:00

好，我會試試

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