每週一MBA生涯公益解惑日：大家看看我的Goal 是否有大漏洞
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http://mbacareerfitter.blogspot.com/2021/11/mbagoal.html
Q:
大家看看我的Goal 是否有大漏洞：
I have a long term plan to build up my own software company in IT industry. China has so many talents of software engineering, but China dose not own world famous software companies. While, India’s software industry have boomed up and cultivated many well-known native software firms, such as InfoSys and Satyam. On the other side, foreign software and solution companies, such as SAP, Oracle and Microsoft, almost occupied China’s software industry. Ironically, they hosted their R&D centers in China and
hired a bunch of Chinese engineers. I aspire to take the responsibility to alter the situation and foster a world-class software service provider from China.
For this goal, first of all, I should build and sharpen my business capabilities before 35 years old. In Intel, I inspired my potential and learned a lot about various leadership styles, effective team work, customer orientation, and business operation. Especially, Intel’s open and global working environment cultivated me to be a pro-active and initiative guy with global thinking. However, only a MBA program can offer me systematic business management trainings to improve my general skill-sets of
international business operation. Secondly, I need a business co-partner, who are smart and passion. In a top MBA school, it will be easy to get this task done. Thirdly, I should find out the venture capital to support the setup of my business. So I prefer study in US for my MBA program, where it is relatively easier to get capital support.
A:
根據大量秒殺含常春藤等名校MBA獎學金的經驗，這篇essay文法需要小修，但文法上並沒有什麼太大問題，語氣平鋪直敘也沒什麼不好。
BW上的錄取sample很多都是這樣的語氣。
長程目標有大方向，講到大陸與印度趨勢都很好。
不過以上狀況都無關緊要。
主要問題有幾大點：
一是大陸與印度有這些趨勢，只是總體經濟面。
跟您個人生涯的關係為何?
要有細部的個人動機結合。
二是為什麼這樣的趨勢要由您來執行這樣的目標?
你有什麼個人能力或特別經歷，與其他競爭者區隔?
為什麼十幾億人要由你來執行，而不是別人? 你跟別人有什麼不同?
這篇essay主要問題就是