[分享] 創勝文教-王梓沅老師用AWA教你練邏輯思維

作者: AImau (Go NTE)   2020-01-05 12:13:08
【王老師寫給你看】用 GRE 分析寫作練邏輯思維、學術寫作,留學時台灣
學生別再當美國學生的後援會啦!
除了「時間不夠」之外,準備 GRE 分析寫作的台灣考生最常碰到的致命傷就是寫了半天
「沒有切題、討論到該討論的東西」。
而這也是不管原本英文程度如何的學生、還是學霸指數多少的學生,都會遇到的狀況。
雖說很多考生都聽過「主題句」很重要(主題句 = 扣題立場+原因) ,但「實際操作」跟
「頭腦裡知道」往往有很大的差距,大概 5 個學生裡有4 個就會偏題。
除此之外,我們的母語中文表達想法時的 vagueness ,也很常讓台灣考生偏題或沒掌握
好題目的 scope 。
(e.g. 題目問高等教育對職涯發展的影響,結果學生一直在討論高等教育或是教育 )
假設今天我們拿到了這個高頻題:
To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one
must study its major cities.
某學生在第二段寫了這樣的主題句:
First of all, the most important characteristics of a society can be defined
in a variety of ways.
寫完後,我問了學生:
‧ 你覺得你這樣有回答到問題嗎?
‧ 你是如何分析這個題幹 (prompt) 的呢?
‧ 為什麼一開始就把 "understand" 和 "must study" 這兩個重要的概念給丟掉了呢?
學生後來又加了一句話,變成 (原文直接呈現,無做調整)
First of all, the most important characteristic of a society can be defined
in a variety of ways. Based on the reason, we may not rule out the
possibility that the most attracting characteristic in one's heart is not
existed in the major city.
‧ 加了第二句話後,我們又看到了至少4個問題:
(1) important characteristics 怎麼被過度成 attracting characteristics 了呢?(
一字代換即離題)
(2) 補 in one's heart 的用意是什麼呢?
(3) 核心概念的 "of a society" 在第二句話消失了
(4) is not existed 為嚴重會導致扣分的文法錯誤(因文章有5處出現一樣的錯誤)。
啊,英文好難啊,你一定這樣想。怎麼會才寫兩句話,就那麼多問題呢?主因來自於大家
忽略了好的學術寫作學習,需要系統性的訓練、和練習。很多考生都錯以為範文看一看、
點子想一想就可以上場了。
依照著學生的想法,我試寫了一段:
I partially agree with the statement, as we can certainly gain a deeper
understanding of some defining features of a society by studying its major
cities, where we can easily observe the socio-cultural events, beliefs, and
phenomena that collectively contribute to the construction of the "identity"
of a society. However, it should be noted that some of these features that
help define a society can ONLY be observed in small towns, as opposed to
major cities. Therefore, if we wish to thoroughly

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