: Whether people receive higher education get more
: opportunities is a great issue in today's society.
我覺得 great 和 issue 接在一起很奇怪。
在這個論題中 issue 似乎太超過 problem也許會比較適合。
但是這似乎也不是「問題」，比較像是決定，所以
Whether people receive higher education get more
opportunities are debatable in the current society.
: In my view, I don't think this theory is right, and the
: followings are my reason. One reason is
: that people have their strengths and advantages,
: but not only in academic*. People's academic
* academic 名詞不適合用在這
: achievement cannot represent their career path.
: The other reason is I know that many people who
: receive higher education cannot figure out what
: the job they want to do.
我個人不太喜歡使用 in my view 感覺本身就是贅字，
若是因為要湊字數，乾脆用 from my point of view。
題目中有註明高等教育得到更多工作機會是個theory嗎？
原因二需要敘述理由。
原因三跟主題不相關，不知道要幹嘛和有沒有比較多機會
完全是兩件事。
However, I disagree with the idea and the reasons are
twofold. Firstly, it cannot show one's strengths
and advantages while we only focus on academic
success. Next, if the graduate does not work in
the field, the tertiary degree could be futile.
: As for me, I was not good at studying. After
: graduating from college, I didn't choose to
: enter a graduate school but did the job of the
: salesperson in a car dealer until now. In my
: company, I found that I have a talent to convince
: customers to buy expensive cars. After one year,
: I was promoted to a sales manager and received a
: lot of chances to go our branches company in
: American to learn more about management skills
: and take a series of training.
as for me 用在這個內容不通。
car dearer 通常指買賣都有，讓人聯想到二手車。
Personally, I did not choose to take higher education
since I have never performed well in the school.
After graduated from the college, I got a job as a
salesperson for ***(company name) in the local branch.
I found myself have the talent to convince customers
to buy expensive cars. A year later, I got promoted
to the manager of sales department, and received many
supports from the company such as visting American
branch and training on management skills.
: I hope that one day I can have my own business,
: and I think my achievement will not be less than
: those whose degree is higher than me.
結尾離題。
Many friends from the college who chose the path
of higher education have not in the management
positions, which I believe the education does not
provide more opportunities in the career.